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Untitled - Finished by ~Icewanderer:iconIcewanderer:



No more slow motion
Hiding you emotions
She says it's not fair
That we gotta play this game
Every time we see each other
We're fading, replaying, falling
From the earth as we know it
We gotta keep our flames lit


Don't cry now he whispers
No more disaster
We can make it through
It's not fair that we gotta
Play this game
Every time we see each other~


Here is it every instance
Keeping distance
Every touch farther away
Things emotions won't say
Keep it this way till you fall apart
Breaking my heart
A tragic tale that never ends
Until you call my name, send for me again


Screaming out, caving in
All the time she's saying "where have you been?"
Crying out tears of her own mistake
Lying in bed now wide awake
What can you do what can you say?
When everything's been washed away
She says it's not fair that we gotta play this game
Every time we see each other
We're hiding, running, and sinking down through the
Earth as we know it
We don't know if we can make it fit


Now they're spinning away from each other
No more are they each a lover
But no one notices the pain that's been hiding behind eyes
Each one making up lies


Don't cry now he whispers
It's not totally over
We can make it through
It's not fair that we gotta play this game every
Time we see each other ~


Here in every instance
Keeping distance
Every tough farther away
Things emotions try to say
Thinking this way - a new start
I don't want to have to break my heart
A tragic tale that never ends
Until you call my name, send for me again


But whispers of an unknown truth
Called away by pasts youth
Lives all in disarray
These are things screaming emotions say
A tragic tale that never ends
Pick up the pace again
©2008-2009 ~Icewanderer
:iconicewanderer:

Author's Comments

okay so like I'm still keeping the not finished one up and not messing with it so that if this one sucks and I can see why and go back....cause I don't remember where the not finished one is....besides on here....><....and yeah I asked my friend about this one and he said it had an irregular rhythm...(maybe I don't know) but yeah all I know is that it's finished^^ lol
so here it is

oh all I know is that it sounds weird like words (probably that irregular rhythm...-_-...so yeah..

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:icongalagox:
I thought it was good, and fitting for valentine's day!

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the more knowlege you gain about the world around you, the more you realize you have only scrached the surface
:iconsunreaver:
I'm :+fav:ing this one too, my dear ^^
And ya know what this rhythm reminds me of? Bleed it Out, from the new Linkin Park album. Can't really say why, but the words seemed to fit.
Nicely done, as always

:hug:

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"Man is the only creature that refuses to be what he is."

Reviews? Comments? Something? ;_;
:iconicewanderer:
aww thank you ^^ lol and yeah I suppose it is

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Alone he walks along the shore
Shes calling him to drag him to her icy depths
but he cannot resist her, as she softly whispers to him through the breeze that carries her melody
:iconicewanderer:
OMG thank you^-^ I'm all like omg yay ^^ cause I'm happy that people find it good lol

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Alone he walks along the shore
Shes calling him to drag him to her icy depths
but he cannot resist her, as she softly whispers to him through the breeze that carries her melody
:iconsunreaver:
But, I find everything you do good, so what are you worrying about? ;P

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"Man is the only creature that refuses to be what he is."

Reviews? Comments? Something? ;_;
:iconicewanderer:
hehe I worry because I don't know really ^^' ,it's just something I do because writing is myself..ya know? It's like parts of me...so yeah^^

--
Alone he walks along the shore
Shes calling him to drag him to her icy depths
but he cannot resist her, as she softly whispers to him through the breeze that carries her melody
:iconicewanderer:
I commented to it, but I went through the work rather than on here so I don't know if it will show that I did..but I did^^ lol so yeah just saying ...

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Alone he walks along the shore
Shes calling him to drag him to her icy depths
but he cannot resist her, as she softly whispers to him through the breeze that carries her melody
:iconfly0away0:
OMG YAYNESS!!!!!!

all your poems seem to remind me of specific people...

I didn't notice an irregular rhythm...
it sounds like a song to me ^-^

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~Mayisha
:iconicewanderer:
YAYNESS maybe I could turn it into one ^^

--
Alone he walks along the shore
Shes calling him to drag him to her icy depths
but he cannot resist her, as she softly whispers to him through the breeze that carries her melody

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